Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *stands up from behind the desk and turns to the whiteboard behind it, a deft hand picks up a red dry erase marker, scrawling across the top of the board in big, bold, easy-to-read letters*
Naughty 101: The Home of Good Chat
*turns back to the gathered group, sure to separate into class members and non-class-members here to cause trouble... and spectators... very soon* This course has been designed to cover what might seem like established, common-knowledge material. While this session, Lesson 2, builds on the foundation of Lesson 1, it still remains fairly simple, and is thus not recommended for veteran chatters. Of course, all are welcome to attend, listen, and participate in the discussion. Feel free to PM with any questions that come to mind, I'll answer in kind, then repost the exchange where appropriate in the open. Being that the online world lacks anything more than loosely-agreed-upon conventions for its etiquette guidelines, the opinions offered by this course are entirely my own, based on my personal experience in chat, BDSM, and the world in general. More experienced participants have the potential to serve as additional help, to broaden everyone's mutual understanding with additional perspectives, so please, if you have something to contribute, PM it to me and I'll work it in where I can. This class is slightly longer than Lesson 1, so please try to contain to PM any unrelated chatter. I'll count on tyme to make sure those entering know to keep their greetings and idle banter to PM.

~lolli~ says to Osanogokoro: *tilts my head checking out Your ass*

Osanogokoro
says to ~lolli~: *shakes it, carefully flexing muscles to accentuate it through the tailored folds of my slacks*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *writes the next heading on the board, and continues*
Lesson 2 - The Walls, Windows, and Doors - Serves and Scenes

~lolli~
says to Osanogokoro: *swooons then shakes my head bringing me back to earth to listen*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Continuing in the bad simile of the house, consider serves and scenes to be your walls, windows, and doors. They provide you with protection and allow others the privilege of looking into your mind, even offering a way to come inside. Serves and scenes are your bricks and mortar to build up the world of your imagination in chat. So when the time comes for you to perform, you want to be able to give your absolute best, right?

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: But what does that really mean, to give your absolute best? What makes a good scene good? This is today's focus.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Our topics today include the concept of "Awareness," defining the focal points of a good scene, and the differences between a scene that is "decent" from one that is undeniably good. Time and attention span permitting, we'll get into another lits of dos and don'ts... let's just see how things go.

warm woman says to everyone: listens and thinks, damn I don't know anything

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *clears the board for a moment, giving my ass one more shake after hearing the confection's head hit her desk in swooning... then writes one word on the neat whiteboard in large letters*
- Awareness -
This might seem self-explanatory, but it would amaze you the kind of difference you will know in chat if you build an awareness, consisting of three components.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *adds another little blurb, underlines it, and turns to the class to speak*
Component I: Self - What do you look like? What are you wearing?
- Establish relatively firm guidelines to yourself about exactly what you want yourself to look like in chat. Notice, this does not have to be a strict interpretation of what you look like r/t, but rather can take the form of your ideal self. Your chatroom persona may be whomever you choose him or her to be, but keep in mind that so is everyone else's, and we all have the same degree of freedom in the choosing. Some things you need to settle on are hair color, eye color, height, relative weight or body type, overall skin tone, and the sizes and shapes of pertinent attention-getting parts. Bonus points are awarded for makeup, hairstyles, tattoos, piercings, and painted finger and toe nails.
- Clothing is also an important detail. While among certain factions in chat, submissives are required to be clad in naught but a collar, it's not necessarily a given. In fact, even if it is a given, establish it to yourself anyway, Dom/mes love to watch the revelation of nudity. Remember that clothing can be an excellent way of directing attention to your favorite parts, particularly in the delineation of the fall of a strap or the rustle of a skirt's hem across the backs of thighs.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: This might seem like fairly simple stuff, but think about the last few scenes you've seen where the girl took completely for granted the fact that she was beautiful, young, and naked. Of course, men are even worse about this, tending to focus on a few *coughs* specific parts.

~lolli~
says to Osanogokoro: *gasps as the papers I pick up to fan myself with make a loud fluttering noise*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Another big one is *writes a little more up on the board, underlining it as well*
Component II: Environment - Where are you?
- The first thing on the agenda is to become aware of the room. When you walk in, what do you imagine the room to be? Is the floor stone or hardwoord? Is it large or small? What sorts of furnishings are about? Where are they? Are there lights or windows? If you can see outside, what time of day is it? What's the weather like? Some rooms provide a general description, but in the absence of that, certain conventions come to pass, with more added by extrapolation every time someone comes online. Naturally, it would be impossible to keep track of every single addition that the imaginations of every visitor make, so focus on yours for now. In your mind, establish as much as you need. If a previous scene has already established elements of the environment, be glad you were paying attention and put them to use!
- For a food or drink serve, this might be an overall idea of the shape of the room, where the doors are, to where they lead, the general layout of the kitchen/servery, including food storage areas (refridgerator/chillery and pantry), utensil and plate/cup storage (scullery), water taps, ranges and ovens, small appliances, etc. A general accord of understanding between the submissives of a particular home is a good thing to have, so everyone reaches for the pots from the same place. Diagrams and floorplans of the kitchen (focusing on its cabinets, pantries, and chillery) and the home are even better. A great many r/p rooms go into this kind of depth for their players, and while BDSM chat isn't the same as r/p, you'll never guess from whence nine out of ten good scripters come.
- For a scene, mentally identify where the implements are, what fixtures are available, and so on. This is something that can and should be agreed upon in advance, especially if the scene requires the participation of others. It goes without saying that a submissive should follow the Dom/me's lead, but it would benefit if all parties involved if everyone knows how far away the cross, spanking bench, or stripper pole on the other side of the room is. This variety of information is also handy to have in the posted floorplan of the home.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: An agreed-upon floorplan is something we all might consider doing... or, of course, if there already is one, someone pass the ketchup, my feet taste better that way.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Interestingly, though, the single most commonly unexploited element in a scene is neither self nor environment, but
Component III: Audience - Where are they? What can they see? What do they look like?
- Try to gather from the various other chatters where they are in the room. If they don't establish it themselves, you're safe to assume that it doesn't matter to them, and you've just gained carte blanche to place them anywhere convenient for your purposes (or inconvenient for theirs). It's helpful to know where people are if you're going to dance around the room, though keeping it straight in a busy room is nearly impossible. Draw yourself a diagram or make notes in Notepad if necessary.
- Once you've determined where the eyes are, figure out what they can see from that perspective. Shaking your ass is great for the people behind you, but if there are any people in front of you, they're going to get a different view. Make an account of any objects that might obstruct an observer's vision, or use them. Peeking around the back of a couch can be very sexy. Also, be sure to let your audience know where their eyes should be on you- use your self-description to include visual points of reference on your body (more on this later in the lesson). - Also try to discern what your audience members look like, what they're wearing, etc. Keep in mind that avs may not always match, so pay attention. If someone hasn't specified, the av is fair game as a basis for assumption, even if it's a completely naked guy holding a candy-striped North Pole with "Merry Christmas" on the top in big green letters. Use your manners and your submissive quirkiness to get away with the ribbing of lazy audience elements. After all, any potential personage of your attention should be able to keep pace with your quality of post, don't you think?

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Bottom Line:

Know who you are, where you are, and who's watching from where.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Any questions so far? It seems dangerously quiet in here.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: i think we are all taking notes Professor *w*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *looks around, slowly, pale eyes moving from quiet space to quiet space... nodding to tyme* I can dream... *quietly deflates my ego, then gets back to the lesson plan*

~andrea gail~
says to ~lolli~: ~glances at you~...we get points?

~lolli~
says to andrea gail: *glances back and whispers* not you and I *snickers*

-•-Veracious-•-
says to Osanogokoro: I think those are all excellent points...

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: well there is that all are eyeing the Professor's ass as well..... but You didn't hear that from me Sir *w*

~lolli~
says to tyme: *glances at you and mouths suck up*

Osanogokoro
says to -•-Veracious-•-: *nods appreciatively...* Thank You, Big V. *turns back, clears off the board, starting fresh, with a new, green marker...*

-•-Veracious-•-
says to everyone: As fine as Osan's arse may be....I am not eyeing it.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: and as Veracious said, all good points..... i know that i need to learn *w*

Osanogokoro
says to -•-Veracious-•-: Thanks for that too

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: - Focal Points -
The easiest way to grab and hold the attention of an audience in chat is imagery, using your words to paint a picture, a technique employed by the best bards and storytellers for millennia. The ability to create a compelling image in the mind's eye of those watching is what separates bad from decent, and can be learned, honed, and polished in six simple steps.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Step 0: Know Your Subject Matter - Before you do something online, know how it's done r/t.
- If you want to be a spot-on submissive and you don't know how to prepare food and drinks, dance, tempt, tease, seduce, and generally live life to the fullest, start learning now. No one expects you to be a certified bartender or a gourmet chef, but if you're asked for a Manhattan, it might be nice if you know how one is made and what the various ingredients resemble. Similarly, it's good to know what the various implements of BDSM look like, how they're used, and how a submissive should interact with them. Quick Google searches are good to answer quick questions, as are fellow chatters (remember the "ask questions" suggestion from Lesson 1?), and only a miniscule effort is required to have a passing familiarity with things you might need. Preparation empowers truer realism, which is what separates the good from the mediocre.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: You'll all notice this is "step zero." That's how basic and necessary it is. From where I stand, no submissive... or Dominant, for that matter... can be successful in a scene if H/he or S/she doesn't actually know what to do.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And now things start to get more difficult, actually requiring some effort, and possible changes to your perspective...
Step 1: Pay Attention to Detail - In everything, r/t and v/t.
- From the moment you wake up in the morning, start paying attention to your body as you move through the day. You've established what you look like in the room, now watch what the real you looks like doing common things like standing, kneeling, walking, reaching, and so on. For even an act as simple and standard as walking, a vast array of tiny details come together in concert, harmonizing in a perfect blend of rhythm and motion, so use this to your advantage. Consider keeping an activity diary for a day or two, noticing things like what happens when you stand, sit, kneel, lean, turn, walk, and run. If you can work this information into your posts, it will add realism that's specific to you. Also, if you find yourself in a position to watch a dancer, artist, or musician, pay attention to what his or her body does in the craft. In this vein, you may add skills to your chat persona that you might not have in reality. Take fullest advantage of the fantasy, but bear in mind that someone else in the room might actually have the skills you're only pretending to know, so mind your steps.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: For example, I'm only pretending to know how to give a classroom-type lecture.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And now, the easiest... and hardest... way to immediately improve yourself.
Step 2: Provide Visual Points of Reference - Try for at least five in each post. It's easier than it sounds.
- When you walk in the room, greet, talk, dance, serve, or anything else where it matters to you how it looks, give at least five visual points of reference for the viewer in each post. Spell out where your hair, eyes, lips (smile), hands, hips, chest, knees, or feet are, and what each are doing. Whether in motion or still, speak of your feet, legs, hips, back, hands, chest, smile, eyes, and hair. Work up from the bottom, down from the top, or start from your center and work out, but always in a discernable order. Don't be afraid to tell your audience where their eyes should be (i.e. where you feel their gazes), especially during a dance. If you can't think of five, think harder. Even standing in front of a counter while cutting fruit for a dessert can easily make five references- left hand steadying, right hand cutting, eyes watching the knife, smile enjoying the smell of the fruit, hips against the counter.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: The slightly subtler point in that little bit was that it's alright to repeat the same points of reference, or rotate between a group of seven or so... you only have so many parts that will be doing something interesting, after all.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Step 3: Add the Medium Things - The devil's in the details.
- When you look at, approach, use, or otherwise interact with a knife, pot, pan, rag, glass, foodstuff, dildo, or anything else, give it two to five words to describe it. If you're dancing to music, go all out to describe it, from the deepest bass of the backbeat to the highest treble of the melodic line, and though lyrics are optional, musician and title are not. It should be expected for those who are able to pull up the featured song on Youtube in another window/tab, providing the link yourself is optional. Don't just talk about where your eyes or hands are, mention what they're looking at or touching.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: Professor.... You do a damn good job at pretending to give aclassroom-type lecture *smiles all good student-like*

Osanogokoro
says to tyme: And your impression of a teacher's pet brownnose is incredible, sweetheart... It makes me proud.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: grins.... *proudly* at the wonderful Professor

~andrea gail~
swats tyme's ass, turns quickly with a grin and says: suck up!

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *continues, because it's too damn easy to get distracted admiring my own admiration committee*
Step 4: Read before You Post - At least until you get the hang of it.
- Take the ten seconds to read over your post before you hit "submit." If you don't get a clear mental picture, add to it. Your confidence in yourself will vastly improve if you give a post the approval and have it met with intrigue by the others gathered. This practice will also wean you of your most common typos, since you'll fix them before they show themselves to the world.

phaedra
says to tyme:
*pouts an kicks myself for not mentioning i have more than 7 parts that do interesting things*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Believe it or not, I'm proof-reading every one of these posts before I submit, even though I spent two weeks working up the script. Maybe I'm just that damn neurotic, but it was embarrassing as all crap last week with the formatting errors.

~lolli~
says to andrea gail: *leans close and whispers* think she is bringing Him apples too?

~medusea~
says to everyone: quietly takes notes

tyme
says to andrea gail: *shoots a spitball* at you..... hoping to change my rep *l*

~andrea gail~
says to ~lolli~: speaking of apples...where's mia?...lol....~glances up~...shhhhhhh

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And the sixth of the six steps, counting step zero...
Step 5: Make it Interesting - People who want to know "what" really want to know "how."
- For every other or every third environmental or visual detail you mention in a post, include something about the way your body reacts to it. For example, if the floor is cool, smooth stones, mention that as you step away from the radiant warmth of the rustic fireplace, its mantle crafted in a solid, dark-stained section of knotted ebony, the chill against your bare feet sends shivers racing up your spine.

~lolli~
says to tyme: *ducks*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Bottom Line:

If you find yourself lost, confused, or uninterested by the vagueness of a scene, consider what a sprinkling of detail would do.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *looks around the class, noticing the little side-conversations... and dilligent note-taking...* How's this all flowing so far? Are the parcels of text too big? It's running a lot faster than last week did, which is good, but I don't want to bore anyone... Thoughts?

tyme
says to everyone: ignores all the *bad* girls in class *l*

~andrea gail~
says to everyone: ~screams loudly....rolls over on the pillow....right hand clasped tightly over one eye.....left arm and legs flailing in agony....smacking muse and lolli on either side~....like that?....lol

warm woman says to Osanogokoro: I have comments Sir but really don't want to distill the flow of what You are saying *s*

~andrea gail~
says to tyme: thanks btw.....i needed that eye...*nods*

‡ dark muse ‡
says to Osanogokoro: it's fine Sir...*s*

Osanogokoro
says to ‡ dark muse ‡: Thank you, lovely muse, I appreciate that.

Osanogokoro
says to andrea gail: *eyebrows lift, eyes widening, leering up at you* oh, come on... A cyber-spitball isn't that dangerous.

~lolli~
says to andrea gail: owwwwwwwwwwwwwwww *rubs where you smacked* careful I am delicate *L*

Osanogokoro
says to warm woman: Feel free to shoot them to me in PM, so I can work them into the lecture... they could be very good points

tyme
says to andrea gail: *grins* .....and that's all...... gawd i have a long way to go

phaedra
says to Osanogokoro: good pace Sir and good amount of lines per post...*smiles cherry red lips ever so sweetly as jade eyes peek at tyme*

Osanogokoro
says to phaedra: *smiles, nodding* Thank you, lovely phaedra

~andrea gail~
says to Osanogokoro: i was improvising....*nods lots*
tyme
says to phaedra: thinks i have some ass-kissing competition *eyes you for receiving the next spitball*

phaedra
says to andrea gail: *whispers* twas verra descriptive...*nodsnods*

Osanogokoro
says to andrea gail: I thought I was trying to teach you to not make shit up off the top of your head... A spitball in the eye causing permanent retinal damage? What'd she use, a grenade?

phaedra
says to tyme: *readies my pretty purple folder for spitball deflection*

~andrea gail~
says to phaedra: lol....thanks luv

warm woman says to everyone: notes I seem to be the only woman NOT sucking up to the teacher *chuckles*

tyme
says to warm woman: what do you call that last statement *w*

warm woman says to tyme: a tired cynical remanrk?

~andrea gail~
says to ~lolli~: ~rubs you~....shhhhh

~andrea gail~
says to Osanogokoro: felt like it....yep yep

~sage~
says to everyone: ~snickers softly at the girls micheviousness~

~sage~
says to everyone: (thinks she worded that sooooo wrong, hehe)

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: A good point raised already... Realism is definitely better than fantasy, when it come to raw sex appeal... While it's true we can paint ourselves in chat to be whomever we choose... what body do you know better than your own, so what body can you describe better than your own?

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: raises hand

Osanogokoro
says to tyme: *nods to you* last question/comment before we move on, go ahead tyme

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: i don't have the exact line You spoke in Lesson 1 but, it was something along the lines of, reality is good yes, BUT you don't have to describe your warts, wasn't warts.... but You get the idea and i am sure You recall the reference Sir *s*

Osanogokoro
says to tyme: *nodding* Aye... precisely. Don't describe the scar from when your kidney was stolen in Tijuana, but be honest.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: that's the one..... kidney *l*

~casia~
says to everyone: ~slides through the door, deep blue eyes lifting to warmly survey the room........stepping with a soft whisper of small feet through the room, tendrils of gold dropping softly over slender shoulders as she moves to her place.........curling gently upon her pillow near His chair, full lips curving to a bright smile as her voice lifts in a smooth caress~.......good evening, A/all

~andrea gail~
says to tyme: ~mumbles~ that was one of my 7 interesting parts....*nods*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Ok, moving on... To answer the question of the ages... what's the difference between a scene that's "ok" and a scene that's "good?"
- The Differences between Decent and Good -
Ok, so now you have the groundwork and basic guidelines to perform a decent, appreciable scene. You've mastered the art of including your body's reaction to things and are striking out in the realms of detail. What now? Here are eight big differences between a decent script and a good script.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Difference #1: The Way You Make Me Feel
- Add an emotional element, weaving it subtly into the overall picture. A smile is nice, but a genuine smile, swelling from the warmth of your heart, is better. Giving that cardiac warmth the origin story of your submissive fire humanizes and realizes it at the same time. Don't just blush, tell me why you're blushing. This is especially true with sighs, smiles, pliant looks, and anything else that can carry multiple meanings. Entirely giving up the element of mystique isn't necessary, but rule out an extreme or two. At least make sure the Dom/me at which you're making doe eyes knows that it's not because He has something on His face. Speaking of which, laughter is another good one to provide an emotional basis, or at least a rational one. Bursting forth with unexplained giggles is very cute, but also very confusing, and will make the casual observer curious as to your sanity.

~su-yin~
says to everyone: sits and listens ..

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Let me provide an example for this one...
Good - *bright, happy smile as You enter, beaming from ear to ear with the joy that Your presence always brings to her heart*
Decent - *lips curl to a happy smile at Your entrance*
Bad - *smiles*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Emotions make a post clearer, easier to understand, and more real. They also prove conclusively that you are, in fact, not a robot.

~casia~
says to everyone: ~blushes and quiets~

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: In fact, they might just be the dividing line between nerdy and cool when doing The Robot.
Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Difference #2: The Small Stuff
- Once you start becoming detail-oriented, keep going! Mention the smallest, tiniest details, but not every single one of them for every single thing, or your scene could lag. With each post, focus on one particular feature to near-excruciating detail, whether it be an object, an action, or a feeling. Explore every possible corner of it, taking good note of all its myriad features, then provide an ample measure of detail to the rest of the post, lest it end up lopsided.

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~giggles~
Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And an example...
Good - *turns to you with a cheshire grin, neat rows of pearly teeth set in contrast to the dim of the room, gleaming with a kind of animalistic, sadistic glow... dark eyes shining, glittering with a light that dances all around the gaze...*
Decent - *turns in your direction, grinning mischief, eyes dancing in the light*
Bad - *looks over and grins*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: The world is limited only by your imagination, so paint the richest tapestry you can.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Difference #3: Poster with a Purpose
- Dedicate certain posts to individual items in what will be a long sequence to individual tasks. For example, when serving a beverage, you should use your first post in the scene to describe yourself, especially your starting position, and the setting. Your second post should start your initial movement (rising from a kneel), and your third should take you to the kitchen/servery. Take your time and spread everything out, especially in scenes where you have a lot to establish. Don't be afraid to re-establish things from night to night, especially if you're the first you see going into a particular place.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: To illustrate this point, please notice the line breaks, which are meant to indicate multiple posts...
Good - *the girl nods slowly, taking in His request and repeating it back to make sure she understands* Yes, Sir, she would be glad to fetch You one on the city... *dark eyes lift as she rises from her kneel, a crosswise smile curving her lips at His obscure choice of words... her body having held a proper kneel, though her thighs remained together out of respect for her collar and the Master Whose name adorns it... likewise her upturned chin, carefully lowered eyes, and head held high atop a straight neck and back... though she kept her spine bent with a slight arch, slyly offering up the full rise of bare breasts to stir the attentions of those whose eyes she could see following her figure, while her hands rested easily atop each silken smooth thigh*
*but now she moves, rising with deliberate grace, feeling His eyes on her, the warmth of His gaze sending her mind elsewhere, to thoughts of her Master. she could not deny that it was His eyes she would prefer to be caressing the silken sash wrapped around shapely hips as her small strides spirited her towards the bar, but One asked for service, and she was not in a position to deny Him*
*in another moment, slender legs pass back and forth in a rhythmic dance, bringing her across a flagstone floor to the cool black marble of the bartop, set upon a base of elegant burled mahogany... with feline grace her lower two-thirds disappear from sight behind the high surface, and her hands set to work, her eyes casting one last glance back to the One whose drink she fetches, subtly checking to see that He's not fallen asleep or died of dehydration in the time she's been moving to sate His needs*
Decent - *she nods, holding her kneel for a moment as she answers in a soft tone* Yes, Sir, she will bring You some ice water straightaway! *her smile reflects the pleasure she enjoys in the serve, in submission, and she starts to move, fluidly rising from her kneel*
*quick steps come in rapid succession, spiriting her across the room and behind the bar, where she quickly gets to work finding a glass worthy of the divine touch of His lips*
Bad - *kneeling, she nods* Yes, Sir, water it is. *she rises, moving off to the kitchen with a sassy sway of round hips*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: They all do the same thing, but Good does it with three posts. Decent uses one and a half.
Osanogokoro
says to everyone: There are also subtle details like knowing antiquated vernacular. For the record, if I ever ask for "one on the city," remind me that I grew up on really crappy water, so that's why I drink whiskey.

phaedra
says to Osanogokoro: *giggles and scribbles lil notes in purpley ink in my notebook bout Mr O and His preference for whisky o'er water*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Difference #4: Reactionary Principles
- Pay attention to the other person/people involved in a serve or a scene, and make reference to their replies in your posts! This is an absolutely crucial, critical way of drawing people into their role in your scene, and yes, "audience" is a role. If they're just sitting back and watching, describe the feel of their eyes on you. If they're doing something slightly more interesting, play into that. Try to include everyone you care to include, especially in an open scene, though it's generally a good idea to leave the audience members non-specific unless you're trying to get someone's attention in particular (your Master, for example). If you find yourself waiting too long for the other person to post, start on your next post and leave places where you can react, or make your next post and save your reactions for the next one.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: I'm afraid I can't really illustrate that one, my therapist said it was bad to have conversations with myself... but the voices didn't like that very much.

-•-Veracious-•-
says to everyone: -chuckles-

~sage~
says to everyone: ~continues taking notes, wondering if those were His words or if she actually heard what was in His head.........?~

tyme says to phaedra: pssst best keep an eye out for Him talking to Himself too *w*

phaedra
says to tyme: *bites lil white teeth on the top of my pen and nodsnods...scribblin that note next to His name...along with the phone number of His therapist for emergencies*

Osanogokoro says to everyone: Difference #5: The Balancing Act
- When it comes to detail, reach for the stars, but you don't have to make it known to the world that they're just balls of gas in deep space. When a post is so specific that it leaves absolutely nothing to chance, it's too specific. Certain things can be a little vague. It doesn't matter that the spanking bench is four feet, six inches across by six feet long by three feet high at the highest point, with its knee rests elevated eighteen and a half inces from the floor to be the natural height of the average knee, hand-crafted out of sturdy Pennsylvania oak that's been sanded seven times for optimum smoothness, stained with Thompson's #136 "deep golden honey," and given three coats of Thompson's Water Seal premium lacquer varnish before its knee rests were covered with leftover scraps of lambskin. It's more important that we know how you fit in relation to it. No one comes to chat wanting to read Tolkein, Melville, Tolstoy, or Steinbeck. Try for somewhere between King and Chrichton (R.I.P).

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: This one also doesn't get an example. Do you really want me to go into Steinbeck levels of detail and describe every single blasted eyelash when I wink?

Didn't think so.

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~hates posts that do that, just groans~

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Difference #6: Private Diction
- Pick. Appropriate. Words. If you're being silly, use more comedic adjectives and vernacular. If you're aiming for sex appeal, use sexy words. If you're trying to woo the heart of a Dom/me, romantic prose is good. Take the occasional chance with a new word, gauge reactions, and add or change accordingly. Take a lesson from every Gorean kajira that ever lived and keep a Thesaurus next to your keyboard (or open in another tab). Use it until you can think of more than five ways to say "that feels good" off the top of your head. Build your vocabulary and imagecraft by reading seedy romance novels, and unless you're taking part in the wildest, most carnal scene you've ever known, never refer to your girly parts as a "cunt." It's not sexy. A good rule of thumb is to try to avoid using any reference to a private area that would make a third-grader laugh, a gay man giggle, or a feminist scream in agony. It's also generally a good idea never to refer to any part of the human body with the same vernacular used by your grandmother or your ninth grade human anatomy teacher. Keep in mind, of course, that certain Dom/mes will encourage a girl to employ certain words based on personal preference, and everyone understands that. It's the whole collar = compromises thing again. In a perfect world, you should be using more than one word to refer to someone's important bits anyway, especially the first time.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Gorean training, represent! *raises the roof*

~sage~
says to everyone: ~laughs~

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~thinks Bb prefers when i use raunchy terms like cunt~

Osanogokoro says to ~casia~: Well, maybe that's why He's Bad... shamon!

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: LOL

-•-Veracious-•-
says to Osanogokoro: You are simply frightening with the MJ reference.

Osanogokoro
says to -•-Veracious-•-: I'm trying to appeal to a broader, boreder audience

-•-Veracious-•-
says to Osanogokoro: -laughs- Well..OK.

phaedra
says to ~casia~: *nodsnods and whispers* SK is the same way....but...only in the bedroom...*winks*

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: gawds.....i'm grateful for my gorean traning, Sir.....~nods nods~....was the best 3 years of learning i had

Osanogokoro
says to ~casia~: As am I... just wish it hadn't left as many scars on my back...

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~nods and nods~

~sage~
says to Osanogokoro: ~raises her hand~

Osanogokoro
says to ~sage~: Yes, lovely spice?

~sage~
says to Osanogokoro: well point taken.......it is true tho, however, of course, your Master/Mistress is who you speak to or for, and if they like the use of cunt, then so be it, yes?

~casia~ says to ~sage~: i use lots of terms for my girlie bits, i just know.....`blushes~....when the raunchy is appreciated.....~nods~

Osanogokoro
says to ~sage~: *nodding* of course, lovely... I had a whole monologue in the last lesson about that very idea... I'm nobody special, just the guy who was asked to put these together... if your Master wants something, who am I to tell you otherwise?

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *moves on*
Difference #7: Let it Flow
- Keep your posts roughly the same length, with no abrupt changes in pace. This is best achieved by keeping yourself sequestered from r/t distractions as best as possible, and keeping those involved and/or watching informed if the situation changes. If at all possible, don't start typing with one hand partway into the scene. Try to match or complement the posting size of the other people involved in the scene, but keep things consistent with the mood. Shorter, faster posts can be useful as you build to a climax. This is where those rough, generic outlines you thought up for lesson one will come in handy in planning and acting out a scene.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Now, in Lesson 3, I'm going to seem to contradict this... but if you consider the main thrust of the argument here... it's all the same idea. Abrupt changes in pace are disruptive... but if you work into it, gradually build, and then BOOM it's a whole new scene, it's not abrupt, it's surprising.

~sage~
says to everyone: ~hops up and grabs the potty pass, dashes out for a moment~

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *watches the spice run for the restroom* this is just getting more and more realistic all the time...

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~raises a hand to offer a suggestion on flow~

Osanogokoro
says to ~casia~: *nods* go on

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: when i first started writing descriptive posts.......i started at the top (head hair eyes) and worked my way down.....as i got more practice in with it.......i learned to mix it a bit, but for beginnrs.......very good way to lean how to mix up descriptions of yourself, Sir

~sage~
says to everyone: ~slips back in and settles to her seat, hoping not to have missed a thing~

~andrea gail~
says to ~sage~: good gosh!....did you wash?

~sage~
says to andrea gail: ~shows her hands~ im clean as a whistle babe.......lol

Osanogokoro
says to ~casia~: *nodding in agreement* Aye... I think I put that in the part earlier on about self-description, though... the benefits of coming late *winks*

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~blushes and shooshes~

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *moves on to the last difference, a pet peeve of mine*
Difference #8: Leave Reactions to the React-or
- Never post what another human being is doing unless you are directly repeating or paraphrasing what that person just said. That said, this is a very fine line to tread. It's acceptable, encouraged, even, to describe what someone could potentially notice or feel when that person interacts with something under your control (a part of your body, an implement, etc.), but a major turn-off to describe how that person reacts to it. Confidence can be really sexy, but presumptuousness isn't.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And you bet your boots this one has an example for illustrative purposes...
Good - *smiles a warm, wide smile, leaning in close to brush the sweet, delicate softness of a gosammer kiss to your lips, smirking a bit as the bristly bronze, gold, and copper strands of my vandyke tickles at your face, hoping that the warmth of the kiss rushes through your form as it does mine*
Decent - *smiles a warm, wide smile, leaning in close to brush the sweet, delicate softness of a gosammer kiss to your lips, smirking a bit as you giggle to the tickling feel of the bristly bronze, gold, and copper strands of my vandyke, knowing that soon the warmth of the kiss will overpower that giggle, drowning in your pleasure and desire*
Bad - *grins wide and wicked, lips curved to a purely sinuous upside-down-arch as you step into my arms, coming closer as you're drawn by the sheer animal magnitism of the most captivating eyes you've ever seen... watching you with a powerful sheen lighting up my gaze as I enjoy the sight of a shiver of a tremor racing through your form... my arms taking you in, close, your willing approach an open invitation as I move, my mouth covering yours in the flash of a moment, a heartbeat, the blink of an eye, kissing you deep, hot, and wanton, the tip of my tongue toys along the pliant pillows of satin, gliding into your mouth as your lips part so eagerly for me, the quiet decadence of a moan offered in trade as the dance our mouths step off becomes more feral*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Leave the other person involved a place to go with his or her part in the scene- something upon which to expand or something to which to react. Work together for the betterment of the scene, in concert towards the same goal. Also notice that longer isn't always better.

phaedra
says to Osanogokoro: Hallelujah! *busts from my lips before i can stop it....biting hard on my bottom lip, scrunchin up my face as i mutter* 'pologies Sir...but i simply hate that....

Osanogokoro
says to phaedra: *nodding in agreement* It drives me absolutely NUTS when a girl has the gall to tell me when it is that I'm cumming.

~casia~ says to Osanogokoro: ~crax up~ Osanogokoro
says to everyone: Bottom Line:

Practice. If it seems like a good scene requires a lot of thought and concentration, that's because it does. In time, script will look every bit as fluid and effortless coming from you as you perceive it to be when the best pair off in open post.

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *puts on my best announcer voice* That's right, you too can script like medusea, casia, and andi!

~casia~
says to Osanogokoro: ~blushes~

~andrea gail~
says to Osanogokoro: ~blinks~

tyme
says to ~lolli~: i think we now know who the class pets are *w*

~medusea~
says to tyme: blinks owlishly

-•-Veracious-•-
says to everyone: -pouts because I was not included in that list- *snickers

tyme
says to -•-Veracious-•-: *sniffles*... me neither *grins*

SaMhein
says to tyme: laughes softly ..loves watching people.. Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *puts on the announcer voice again* And if you work especially hard, you might even one day begin to come near the sheer wickedness and naughty ability of the confection, the spice, and tyme!

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *completely deadpan* And in about ten minutes, you can write circles around Big V.

-•-Veracious-•-
says to Osanogokoro: Har Har

~casia~
says to everyone: ~and grabs the potty pass myself~

tyme
says to -•-Veracious-•-: Wwe made the lists Sir *w* guess all that was needed was speaking up... *s*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: And in about ten years, a structure can be constructed large enough to house my enormous, massive, unstoppable... ego.

tyme
says to Osanogokoro: oh no Sir....let it grow! *smile sincerely*

~sage~
says to Osanogokoro: ~rolls her slanted eyes and laffs~

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: *clears off the board and starts writing up another list of Dos and Don'ts*
For all of you who need summaries to everything...
- More Dos and Don'ts -

DO:
• Be bold
• Push the envelope of your experience with every scene
• Do a little research r/t before you try something new so you know what you're talking about
• Expect the attention of those with whom you scene
• Plan your scenes a bit
• Always try to finish what you start

DON'T:
• Rest on your laurels
• Hide behind your collar - be friendly anyway! Get your Master's permission, then get out there and show the world how lucky He is to have you!
• Put up with people who don't appreciate you
• Fake it, make things up from strictly your mind, or guess
• Get too bogged down in every little detail
• Pre-script everything

SaMhein
says to ~*~Abigail Eve Montrose~*~Th...: leans out from my chair in the corner..azures eyes sparkling..soo fucking happy to see you ...inclines a hand for you to come share my chair ..*soo happy you made it*

Osanogokoro
says to everyone: - Conclusion -
While it's true that there's a lot to constructing a proper scene or serve, it's not rocket science. At this time, I want to open up the floor to any questions, comments, and discussion, including the questions that were PM'ed to me during the lecture. The next session, Lesson 3, "Advanced Techniques," will commence next Thursday at 8:00 EST. Be there, because it's bound to be interesting. I’ll be featuring the work of some of the best people in chat today.